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Ana Morgan
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I think there are one or two places in this sub where you could show the actual scene rather than quickly tell that it happened. Also, you could layer in more sensory details and his emotions during the sex scene.

I’m not sure how to make her dialogue sound era-appropriate. But that definitely needs to happen. Maybe research letters or poetry from that time period.

Ana

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