Reply To: Zara West Submissions Home › Forums › Critique Forum › Zara West Submissions › Reply To: Zara West Submissions November 1, 2018 at 5:01 pm #27880 Zara WestParticipant I definitely moved that paragraph in Chapter 28. Thanks for the feedback. Here is chapter 29. The story continues. Attachments:You must be logged in to access attached files.