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Ana Morgan
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Here’s my crit, Zara

Brilliant to have Mic looking in Mexico. And have her father delivery her.

The very end needs something different, IMO. I made two suggestions, but you will come up with something better.

Super story! Thanks for letting me crit it.

Ana

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