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Connie Bretes

Hi Zara, I read the last three chapters but did not do a line by line edit. I read for the overall feel, and while the ending was good, I was disappointed about Mic. Lena had her black moment when she was betrayed by “red heels” and ended up being deported, but Mic didn’t really have his black moment. Realizing that Lena was gone was a start, but I guess I expected Mic to have one more bang or blow up with Wheeler and win, and also, I think I expected more of an evil reaction from Wheeler in chapter 32 when he meets Lena for the last time. After all their history, I just had a problem with Wheeler walking away.  Hope this helps some. Great book though, I enjoyed reading it.


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