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Ana Morgan
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He took Lizzy’s hand in his. She leaned into him and spoke again. “You will come back again, Miss Dashwood?   I WOULD DELETE THE NEXT TWO SENTENCES, THIS IS WHERE I ASSUMED THE STORY WOULD CONTINUE: I would like to share secrets with you while the gentlemen are closeted after dinner.” Lizzy shot him her sly smile.

“Indeed, Mrs. Darcy. One day, I shall return to Pemberley.”

“Until then, Mr. Darcy and I will__________.

Something like this—and the reader knowing before hand that this is a short story—would work, IMO.

Ana

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