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Ana Morgan
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Great chapter, Zara.

I think it is paced very well. Her internal dialogue about Floyd is excellent, as well as the cat-and-mouse game they play. The description of blood-pink ice cream vs wounded men is breathtaking.

Lisbeth seems a bit too easily transfixed with Floyd after drooling over Gunther, and this made me wonder. Still, the observation that Lisbeth has never had a man buy her an ice cream makes sense.

Ana

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