Reply To: Kevin Ryan submissions Home › Forums › Critique Forum › Kevin Ryan submissions › Reply To: Kevin Ryan submissions May 9, 2019 at 6:13 pm #31752 Zara WestParticipant Hi Kevin, Love your blub. Here is some feedback on your opening chapters. Use what is helpful. A rule of thumb I use is if two or more people note the same thing, I look at those spots the hardest. Zara Attachments:You must be logged in to access attached files.