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Jessica Jayne
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Hi Lisa,

Attached is my critique of your first two chapters. I agree with Ana – Cole’s setup is good. You’ve left a little intrigue regarding why he left Montana. I struggled with Sam, which is why you will see so many comments (I apologize now) for Chapter 1. Take a look and let me know if you have any questions. Great start. Look forward to more.

Jessica Jayne
Sexy Stories with Heart
FTHRW Secretary

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