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Ana Morgan
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I think her anticipation of the proposal is much clearer and believable, Lisa. Also her firing is believable now. Maybe have Cole state the cost of the extravagant wedding to emphasize the loss to his business. Could think to herself (kick herself) that she’d been distracted by the anticipation of Austin’s proposal that she just went with the mums and neglected to do the check with the clients? That would bolster the justification for getting fired.

Oh, just thought of this: what if she tells her assistant she’s leaving and not Cole? She skips out, certain all is well. Then Cole could have yet another reason to fire her. (Also I am not sure you need to say she’s behind on her rent. She’s successful and is employed a thriving business.)

Cheers for doing the hard work to get a solid first chapter! Ana

 

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