Kim, I think this chapter is very suspenseful. It is not “listy.”
I made some suggestions and corrected a few places where commas are misplaced. (Don’t worry! You’re not the only loop member who misplaces commas. Just ask Evelyn.)
Thanks, Ana. Appreicate the time and the comments. I’ll post the next chapter later. Commas are my Kryptonite! Bring me to my knees every time and the sad part is this was run through Grammarly. Anyway, thank you!
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