I’m new to the forum, so I haven’t read the first book. I did think there was plenty going on in the opening here to keep me interested though. I think it’s okay it didn’t start with a “bang.”
I put my notes in the form of comments out in the margins. I made my file into a .pdf. If you have trouble let me know, and I can send a different format. My comments begin about halfway through the file.
I think you’ve got a lot of good things going here. After the final spit and polish, it should be in good shape.
Thanks for sharing your work!
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