I’m new to the forum, so I haven’t seen your piece from the beginning. Attached are my notes (just a few) for Chapter 15. I’ve never read a book where a main character had a cleft palate. I’m glad you chose that detail. Great job! I know two people who were born with it, and it makes me happy that vantage point is in your story.
I like everything going on with the chapter. Lots of tension and the pace is good. I made a few suggestions for edits/typos etc.
Well done over all.
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