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Carla Ward
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Here’s chapter 3.

Quick recap of chapter 2, the drunken bridezilla Melanie Novotny puked on Leslie’s vendor booth and Brock saved her by offering the reporter twenty percent off of her wedding cake if she didn’t air the story.

Let me know if the pacing is okay and as always, please make suggestions if you see places to tighten or smooth things, or enhance description.

Also, if you find something funny or it makes you laugh out loud, make a note if you could. It helps if I know what jokes land on target.

 

Thanks so much!

Carla

  • This reply was modified 1 year, 1 month ago by Carla Ward.
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