Reply To: Jenn Fox Submissions Home › Forums › Critique Forum › Jenn Fox Submissions › Reply To: Jenn Fox Submissions September 21, 2019 at 9:32 am #34572 Zara WestParticipant Hi Jenn, Here is my feedback on 68-69. Hope it is helpful. I paid particular attention the the flashbacks. When in doubt, shorter is better. Zara Attachments:You must be logged in to access attached files.