Great comments Zara, thank you. I get nervous when it comes to writing the parts where they actually sculpt cake. I used to make these sort of cakes, and think it’s a little harder to write about because I’m so familiar with it. I have to pretend I’m not familiar and related everything in a way others can understand. And of course, I want to preserve the way cake artists phrase things, so it’s a tough line to walk.
I appreciate everything you pointed out like adding action and deepening POV. Really great stuff. Thanks!