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Rachel Homework 2

From Selection B:

1) What is the CHANGE used in the opener? What CHANGES or signals a change is pending?

The line Dying should have been the worst moment in my life. This tells you 1. That the character is recently deceased. AND that the character is still sentient. Are we looking at a ghost story, vampire or something else? Whatever it is, you know in this line that the character has finished part of her existence  (in this case her mortal life) and is moving into the next phase.
2) Name the EMOTIONS used in or generated by the change and note if they’re a fear or a core need or a combo.

Annoyance. Which tells me I am looking at a comedy, or a light story, rather than a tragedy. This is tied to the fear of extinction – she is dead – but there is also a tie in to loss of autonomy when Alona makes the statement, He couldn’t see me. Nobody could. Despite her rather flippant statements before, you are getting the underlying fear that she is alone now. And to use the cliche statement – no one could hear her scream.

Selection E:

1) What is the CHANGE used in the opener? What CHANGES or signals a change is pending?

The being is undergoing surgery, and is awake. As the paragraph progresses, you realize that it’s an angel who’s cutting off his wings. This is a massive change – even though the character grudgingly admits they volunteered for the surgery.

2) Name the EMOTIONS used in or generated by the change and note if they’re a fear or a core need or a combo.

A touch of anger and sadness bordering maybe even on depression. He states that he feels weak and then corrects himself. He feels diminished. What a change to start with, going from a mythical greatness to something earthly.  I think it would be easy to tie this to the fear of mutilation, but it feels more like a loss of autonomy. By the end of this opening the angel is incapable of flight, he describes himself as heavy and slow now that he is beholden to gravity. He is no longer what he once was.

3) Why do these two openers catch your interest? Situation, style, pacing, voice, setting, or…?

I liked the voice of both of these openings, though they are night and day from each other. The lightness that the teenager dealt with her death and the gritty determination of the angel even as he mourns his wings both called to me. There isn’t much setting in either, but you get the feel for the road (and the exhaust) and  the surgical room with the burnt smells. Both draw you in and make you want to know how these two are going to handle their new normals.

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