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Linnea Sinclair
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Emotions: The comedy of the text I believe plays into the emotions of frustration, annoyance, and the underlying fear. I believe this ties into the fear of separation, specifically, the loss of connectedness, of being a non person. Her comments of the bus driving over AD, and Ben’s car going right through her build well with no one could see her.  You could also go with fear of extinction since she is dead, but I believe her sarcasm and remarks tend to show more the fear of separation than the fact that she is actually dead.  She seems to have accepted the death but can‘t fathom that people cannot see her.

Absolutely! And teaches us something else–we don’t have to, as writers, work to logic or known reactions. We’re in the CHARACTER (so the reader is, too) and what’s important to the character becomes (when well-written) important to the reader. Alona cares less that she’s dead (as is revealed in subsequent pages) and more than she’s not longer “a star.” It’s funny…yet it’s tragic.

Change: This is clearly a change of plans from how Pitt envisioned his evening going. To be summoned, and escorted to the Queen is a very sudden change.

Well said! It’s clear that the Queen isn’t his weekly bowling buddy.

He has been summed to the Queen, given no reason and now has to endure a silent ride while his mind wonders to what is going on and happening. He definitely is not in control of the situation, which to someone in his position is probably a rarity.

As a fan of the series… yes. But you needn’t be a fan of it to, as a writer, know certain occupations come with certain personality traits. And–guess what! Most (note the ‘most’) readers know that as well.

 

I picked the other entry because I can see myself in the character. Obviously, I’ve never been called to the Queen but, I can relate to being called to the boss with zero idea why and a long, silent, lonely walk there.

In one way or another, all of us have been called on some kind of carpet. This opener shows 1) we don’t need to be conversant with that time period and all of its flavors to relate to a COMMON THEME: someone who holds power wants to see me and I don’t know WHY.

Change. Ch-ch-ch-change.

//Interstellar Adventure Infused with Romance//
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