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Kathy thanks so much for your comments. They answer some questions for me. I did initially have more about Daisy’s parents and their acrimonious divorce but then deleted it thinking I might have too much backstory for the opening. So I’ll add it back in. As to the mystery part I have no idea if I need to have that in the opening as I have never written one before, but I think you have a valid point. You made me think about it and  I can add a sentence or two when Daisy is telling Edward about her mom hiring Betsy. Daisy could say something like, Betsy is making my mom so mad I better get home before she murders her. Actually I think that might work good. So thanks for the great comments. Most helpful!!!!

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