Wow! Lots of hooks…..when Ammi asked about gene markers, when she wondered if she could save her dad? Would her mom’s body ever be found?
trigger, set-up Ammi is obviously petrified that she has the gene marker for schizophrenia.
Emotions…you had me on a roller coaster up and down I went. loved the suspense you built up.
For me, everything about this opening was perfect. I definitely would love to read more.