Thank you for remembering that I subbed this story in your character motivation workshop, Linnea. I applied what I learned there and improved the story–especially Galen’s motivation. I love your assessment of my chapter 1. I am swamped at work right now, but will work on your observations asap. Will we be able to resub revised versions?
I woke up yesterday morning reflecting on the lessons and fretting that I should open with chapter 2, since my chapter 1 is more intro and backstory.