Thanks for the feedback. There is one other submission, which included revisions on this chapter and the one before. It should have Chapter 20-21 in the document title, and it begins after Sergio points the gun at Eric to get Elise into the SUV. I made some changes to Elise’s attitude toward Eric and Sergio, as well as the mobsters treatment of Eric.
I noticed your comment about it only being half a chapter. Originally, I started with a pattern of one Eric POV, one Elise POV per chapter, but have shifted so that it’s based more on the scene, rather than the number of POVs. I’d be curious as I post more submissions, if you think it was better the first way.