Excellent chapter, Zara. I have an idea of what’s to come, and this does a good job of foreshadowing.
Thanks for re-reading my last submission and the additional comments. It’s extremely helpful. I’ve noted your comment about the privacy issue at the end of the chapter. For now, I think I’m going to go forward as planned, but I am keeping it in the back of mind that I may need to just eliminate the next scene. I’ve got some revisions to make before I submit it to the group and I want to see what sort of feedback I get before deciding.
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