Vicki, I read the original and the revised versions. I like what you’ve done but I have a question: why Arthur is so nervous about this job? Is it because he hasn’t been undercover for awhile, or is there something else going on?
Thanks for reading, HiDee. The reason he’s nervous is because this is his first undercover assignment and he has a personal connection (unknown to the FBI) to the case. I’m not completely satisfied with the beginning and wonder if I need to reveal more about what’s going on. My first chapter primarily focuses on the characters meeting, but maybe I need to add more about what he’s actually doing there.