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Jessica Jayne
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Hi Lisa, I’m attaching my review of Chapter 2. My biggest suggestion is getting some emotion and reaction from Faye’s perspective. Your descriptions are lovely but they take the reader out of the story when they are not seen from Faye’s view. Weave Faye into these sections. 🙂

Jessica Jayne
Sexy Stories with Heart
FTHRW Secretary

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