I agree about benefitting from feedback, Ellen. To tighten v3 even further, you could eliminate some dialogue tags in the beginning. Ana
Bingo, Ana, well done.
I always find it’s easier to edit someone else’s work rather than my own, don’t you all? My brain/eyes either put in things that aren’t there (and should be) or gloss over things I’ve done incorrectly. Arrgh. 🙂
//Interstellar Adventure Infused with Romance//