Here is my feedback on Ch 22. A very well-written chapter, but the setting isn’t working for me. I know how hard it is to get the love scenes into a romantic suspense from my own series. My characters climb icy walls in snowstorms to get together. But in this case, as I noted before, mafia guys are not going to let their prisoner play hanky-panky with their important family member in a bedroom on the plane behind a closed door. I made a few suggestions – maybe she can sneak away when they land at the airport or when they get to the mansion. Maybe the other crit members can suggest ideas too.
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