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Jessica Jayne
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Hi Vicki, Getting caught up. Great scene. You will see that I did comment in the manuscript that I don’t think a mafia crime family would allow these two to get together and then noticed as I was posting this that Zara mentioned that as well. Eric is FBI/law enforcement and a mafia crime family wouldn’t put their family in a private room with him. I made a suggestion in the manuscript, but I don’t know how the rest of the story plays out. Otherwise, the writing itself is great! 🙂

Jessica Jayne
Sexy Stories with Heart
FTHRW Secretary

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