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Lisa Coy
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Chapter 4 questions–Did I go overboard with gangster’s dialogue? Is having her hide under the bed too cliche to get away with? I couldn’t figure out a way to differentiate the mob, so I used their shoes. Is the sex scene appropriate for a virgin’s 1st experience beyond kissing? I changed Penn’s arc. He’s still the bad guy, but not to the point that he ordered their deaths. His lead man, the man in the dark coat, goes rogue.

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