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Vicki Briner
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Her: “Why should I trust you?” Him: shrug. “Six years flying F-16s for the US Air Force?” Craft it better than that, though. As long as that comes up in the first few pages, you can tickle with a MENTION of the F-16s on pages one or two, then include the full disclosure (relatively speaking) when she challenges him later. Plus I also see her having some smart comeback about F-16s aren’t charter jets, something about not trying to target people on the ground, or “We’re delivering cargo not bombs…” (or whatever–hubs and I just finished watching a documentary on F-16s – 18s on the history channel so some of this is fairly fresh in my mind).

You have great ideas, and this helps with the exchange at the end of this POV scene, which I wasn’t crazy about.

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