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Vicki Briner
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Okay…I have a revised Chapter 22, and to be fair it wasn’t that bad. I took many of the suggestions I got, but not all of them. I decided not to go with the idea of Elise asking to go to the bathroom and sneaking into the room where Eric was being held. For one thing, I thought, if she could get in, why not just let him out? But, that suggestion was what got me going, so I appreciate it.

I didn’t include any of Ch. 21, but that chapter now ends with a brief whisper conversation between Eric and Elise before the plane begins to descend. No more getting up and going into the back.

I’m sure there are still issues, but I am eager to hear your thoughts. Hopefully this will resolve some of the credibility issues with the previous version. If not, let me know.

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