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Ana Morgan
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Emphasizing Mias’ fears of disappointing her father could build tension. She could worry as Ana drives her home from the airport.

I truly appreciate your Serbian heritage. I think you’ve nailed the pressure brilliantly. That’s why it needs to be a struggle. Her struggle to express her true self is the story arc.

I think her father can be a proud Serbian dad without seeming dictatorial. His views are relatable–sons and daughters face their parents’ expectations all the time.

Ana

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