Reply To: Jessica Jayne submissions Home › Forums › Critique Forum › Jessica Jayne submissions › Reply To: Jessica Jayne submissions July 31, 2020 at 2:22 pm #43060 Vicki BrinerParticipant This is really good! So much more tension and emotion. The stakes are raised. Great job! I had a few wordsmithing suggestions and deletions, but that’s pretty much it. Vicki Attachments:You must be logged in to access attached files.