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Jessica Jayne
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Thanks for your feedback, Ana. I will take it under advisement.

I wasn’t going for petty. I was trying to go for insecure and scared for Mia, especially after her fight with her father. Long distance relationships are really hard. Having done the long distance thing with my husband in the early part of our relationship, I remember us getting into these silly arguments on the phone because one of us was feeling insecure about the situation. I think that’s a normal part of the distance, especially in the beginning of a relationship. I was trying to convey that, but it doesn’t sound like it came off that way. Appreciate your viewpoint.

I do like the idea of Kekoa coming up with the solution on his own. I will rework that area right away.

Jessica Jayne
Sexy Stories with Heart
FTHRW Secretary

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