First, thank you so much Ana, Zara, Jessica and Lisa for your suggestions and for holding me to higher standards. Your help has made my story so much stronger, and I appreciate every single comment/suggestion.
Here’s the next chapter. I’m a little iffy about this one. It’s short, but I’m worried there’s too much internality. I don’t want the overall pace to come to a screeching halt, but I also know that nonstop action is tiring for the reader. So….I’m curious to hear your thoughts.
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