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Jessica Jayne
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Hi Vicki, Great chapter. I think the internal thoughts are good here because it sets both characters’ frame of mind. And I love the chapter ending. 🙂 Made a few small comments – use what is useful.

Jessica Jayne
Sexy Stories with Heart
FTHRW Secretary

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