I’m not sure I built enough tension for the attack scene in chapter 6. I THINK THE ATTACK SCENE NEEDS MORE TENSION.
Also, should she have more internal thoughts while being attacked, or would that slow pacing? I VOTE FOR MORE INTERNAL THOUGHTS, REACTIONS TO WHAT’S HAPPENING TO HER. Her thoughts-short, desperate, survival mode– can be incorporated into blow by blow action and reaction.
Does the flashback to her family reveal vital information? Or does it just show she’s teetering on unconsciousness?
I LOVE how she wakes up with the bird –a turkey vulture, by chance? Great visual details!
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