“What?” Barbara screamed. “I never told him he could come to get you. I never even spoke to him. I didn’t even know he’s here. Give him the phone. I want to talk to him.”
“He’s in the restroom.”
“You get out of there. Right now. Now, do you hear me? I won’t have him abducting you. Get out, Jessie. Run home. Now. Don’t hang up. Stay on the phone and get out right now.”
“Just do it. Now and stay on the phone. I’m swinging by the pizza place on the way home. You head home, now. Run.”
This is a strong example of how shortened speech can display stress. We feel her fear and insistence. Was this exchange like this in your first draft, or did you utilize the lesson on regressing to shorten the sentences? Either way, well done!
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