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“I will tell you this, detective Winslow,” her voice curt and serious. “You think you love her but you don’t. You feel responsible for her. You are obsessed with finding the killer. That’s all well and good, but it’s not love. Angus thinks he doesn’t love her but he does. Don’t screw this up for her?”
We do learn a lot about her, and what’s important to her, from this. It’s a succinct and vivid look into her character. And the flip from jokes to serious heightens the impact.
Why is the last sentence a question? It seems to be more of a command on behalf of her friend. It might have more power without the hesitation of a question.
The “not much upstairs” “but what a staircase” bit is marvelous.
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