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Vicki Briner
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Jessica, thank you for the comments/suggestions. I’ve been looking forward to your feedback. I loved your “fling the door open to her heart” suggestion.

Zara, great suggestions (as always). I appreciated the comment about them having a”clean” conversation. I’ve struggled with this because I didn’t see any reason why he’d have a condom. Originally, I wrote that he pulled out, but a couple of friends read it and both said they thought it was gross. Then I had an “Oops, there might be a baby,” discussion, but I didn’t like that, either. Finally, I settled on the current version, but still wasn’t satisfied. Your suggestion makes sense, and I know exactly where I can work it in. Thank you.

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