Hi Vicki, I was able to get through this one this morning as well and am caught up on your submissions – thankfully. I’d felt so bad.
I like both of these chapters but I think you need to dig a little deeper in both. These can be very climatic scenes, but you have to bring the reader into them with your character’s reactions and emotion. See my comments. I love where the story is going! 🙂
Sexy Stories with Heart
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