January 9, 2021 at 7:54 pm
#58849
Keymaster
Hi Todd,
With track changes, the copy and pasting didn’t work very well, so I’m attaching two docs. One with my beginning edits. One where I only commented on the last scene. I like the story concept. I think it works. I’ve made several suggestions, but nothing major. Ignore anything that doesn’t feel right for you.
Vicki
