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January 10, 2021 at 9:48 am
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Very exciting chapter, Lisa. A few suggestions. Jake’s first wife in the barrel is a truly great plot twist.
Overall, I feel there may need to be more set-up hints earlier in the story to hing at the connection between the mob chasing Faye and Jake’s being with Boss Tom. I had the impression Jake was more of a farmer.
Ana
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