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Todd McGee
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thanks, Ana. I thought about having Mark see her standing in the doorway and then waving her over and noticing that when she sees him, her face lights up. Or I could have her see Tim and Gary and not see Mark, who would have his back to her, until she gets to the table. She could get flustered when she realizes Mark is there. I want both Gary and Tim to notice her physical reaction to him and their interactions.

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