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Victoria Elliot
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Here is my final chapter. I’ve actually added a new scene to the beginning where Eric plants a listening device on the plane. I’m trying to mirror the end with the beginning, but I’m not sure it works. Here is my new first paragraph. I’d love feedback on if it works with the ending.

Movies lie. In real life, Agent Arthur Erickson hadn’t been in a single car chase. There’d been no gunfights. And not a shoe knife or laser beam to be seen. Nope. Undercover assignments were all about the mundane—blending in and acting like a regular Joe.

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