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Victoria Elliot
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Hi Lisa,

I think the setup/progression works pretty well. As for the sex scene, you’ve written a lot of what’s happening, but not as much emotion/sensation. I also think you could add in some internal thought for Faye, as well as some flirty dialogue. I had several questions at the beginning of the chapter and made some suggestions at the beginning of the love scene. I hope it helps.

Vicki

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