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January 25, 2021 at 5:20 pm
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Followup thought, Todd. I don’t know if this chapter is complete, but I’m thinking you might want to advance the plot or heighten the tension by having Mark and Milly interact (spar) more. He chokes through her presence but there’s no repercussion for him emotionally. No reaction from her other than to be Milly-nice and go back to Tim. Ana