Good chapter, Todd. Mark comes off as very personable and real.
I am curious how far into the novel we are. Twenty percent? Twenty-five? I think I started reading at Ch. 7 and don’t know everything that came before, but the romance seems to be developing very slowly. Assuming this is a romance, I think you need to up the sexual tension and have more scenes where the characters are together. I’ve read hundreds of romances. The reason I like them is because I like the interplay between the characters. Even when the characters don’t like each other or act as opposing forces, it’s the barbs, the banter and the friction that I most enjoy.
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