Hi Ana,
So glad you are starting something new. I can’t wait to read more. I have made a ton of notes, and I know this is probably still much of a draft so ignore the fine tweaks at this point. Adverbs and telling are okay in a first draft. I just can’t ignore them.
I do have some concerns about this being the start of a romance. Wrote a long note at the end. Love Shane, and I know he will get a great story in your hands. Have you written a pitch or short summary? That would help me understand better.
Zara