Hi Emily, I’ve attached my review of your Chapter 1. Agree with all regarding the dialogue tags. I can relate. I used to do that all the time. It took several chapter submissions to this group to assist in that area. I continue to learn a lot in this group.
I made some other suggestions on making some scenes more active and giving your characters more visceral reactions as opposed to just stating the emotion. Otherwise, I think you have a pretty clean start to a great story.
As a lawyer, I always love the legal romances. 🙂
Sexy Stories with Heart
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