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Lisa Coy
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The new ending shows her more in control. I liked how she knew she was walking into harm’s way instead of just wanting to go home and shower. Her brothers being in possible danger added to the tension. The only part that threw me out of Eric’s urgency was when he took the time to tie the thug up with the lights. I thought your pacing was spot on. I’m looking forward to her brothers’ stories. Nice work.

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